Loved it. You really achieved a very poetic intensity that really impressed me. Great stuff.

This was sweet... and ToTaLlY a fantasy.

Just Kidding, Your Majesty.

But, all in all, this was good, descriptive, and one typo here and there. Haha, Miss Perfectionist. But... yeah it was good. I can tell that your writing is improving, and I hope you'll keep doing so... meaning avoid the aliens... PLEASE.

With all do repect, I shall retire, Your Majesty, Farewell, and Happy Sailing,

*silent darkness*

ow, what a cute little story. It's really good.**kay

O! Very good!

Oh, this story is really beautiful. It was so pretty and well- written. I especially loved the last line "That was beginning of turning with you till forever." This is such a real story, did it really happen to you or anyone?

Aww, did this really happen?

So cute. Adorable.

"Not today’s substitute of almost humping one another" Hahahaha, me giggled at that.

"I don’t think air could get in, because we were spiraling so fast" That's really lovely.

I love the realism in this - the awkwardness is beautiful.

Lovely last line.

Isn't it annoying how the best inspiration always comes at night? I can't write anything decent until about 1am. And that's not good.

Small paragraphs isn't a problem! They fit fine, with the writing. ;-D

Keep writing!