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Nobody-n-Particular
2006-07-14
ch 1,
Of course lovely and fierce.
Matt Sheard
2006-05-02
ch 1,
Hallucinations, the addiction to love (oh dear, I've now got that song in my head), buts the risk of over analysis. A good one, though the second line of the second stanza doesn't seem to read right. The grammar's not quite right, but not sure what effect changing it would have on the poem.

Matt
no.peace.los.angeles
2006-04-28
ch 1,
Oh, I love that second haiku there. Especially the last line, what a great image. Nice. Keep writing! :)
simpleplan13
2006-03-28
ch 1,
great descriptions... I love it
Jezsh
2006-03-18
ch 1,
I like the tone you've used - like you WILL. The image of smoke running through it is really evocative. Very pretty.
citrus scented
2006-03-13
ch 1,
hehe i know what you mean. love it; very sweet.
Manuel Fajar
2006-03-12
ch 1,
Love's,—hormone stronger,

Than nicotine could ever,

Bind to red blood's heart.

Love's wild profusion,

Leaves mind in dazed confusion,

Hoping for fusion.

Strongest addiction,

Without thought's benediction,—

Heart's fond illusion.

For this,—&, no more,

Did life create split sexes,

To cast on heart wild hexes,

That clear mind vexes;

&, everything perplexes.
Aslan Israel
2006-03-10
ch 1,
m addictions come in all forms, ne? Just lovely.
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