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| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-07-14 ch 1,   | Of course lovely and fierce. |
| Matt Sheard 2006-05-02 ch 1, | Hallucinations, the addiction to love (oh dear, I've now got that song in my head), buts the risk of over analysis. A good one, though the second line of the second stanza doesn't seem to read right. The grammar's not quite right, but not sure what effect changing it would have on the poem. Matt |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-04-28 ch 1, | Oh, I love that second haiku there. Especially the last line, what a great image. Nice. Keep writing! :) |
| simpleplan13 2006-03-28 ch 1, | great descriptions... I love it |
| Jezsh 2006-03-18 ch 1, | I like the tone you've used - like you WILL. The image of smoke running through it is really evocative. Very pretty. |
| citrus scented 2006-03-13 ch 1, | hehe i know what you mean. love it; very sweet. |
| Manuel Fajar 2006-03-12 ch 1, | Love's,—hormone stronger, Than nicotine could ever, Bind to red blood's heart. Love's wild profusion, Leaves mind in dazed confusion, Hoping for fusion. Strongest addiction, Without thought's benediction,— Heart's fond illusion. For this,—&, no more, Did life create split sexes, To cast on heart wild hexes, That clear mind vexes; &, everything perplexes. |
| Aslan Israel 2006-03-10 ch 1, | m addictions come in all forms, ne? Just lovely. |