Ow. This one hurts, it really pulls at the feelings. Well done.

OMG! I really really liked this. The last verse was my favorite. Awesome job.

Are you in a creative writing class? Because the way you write, and format the things you write, it seems like you are. It's very...right. I dont know how to explain it. Lets just leave it at saying I like it. I like it a lot. I like the formatting, and the parenthesis. Thanks for the review by the way.