I can't really say much for now, as you said yourself it is only the Prologue. Anyway, things seem to be getting interesting from the last part so maybe you can make the most of that.You might not want any comments going against you style, but I'll put in a little bit anyway. Some parts were a little on the blur side, and maybe that's because you were going too fast, but maybe that could be rectified in the future chapters.
By the way, looks to me as if you haven't updated this for ages? Why don't you, and I'll read the rest.

Never aging. That's creepy and interesting ant the same time. Well, anyway, I hope you update soon. ^_~

Peace

I think its a good plot line. You should organize your sentences and be more definite in your objections. The basic outline for all stories is : Who is my character? What is their objective? What is keeping them from their objective? What is the climax of the conflict? Is there a solution?. You may want to ask yourself these questions so you can organize your creative thoughts into each category. Make sure you don't jump around into different topics. Have one set situation then change it when necessary. I think you made a good choice into keeping this story in present tense. I liked how you used a different personality for each character. You did well explaining the enviroment of the story.

going good so far!! update please!