wow - the imagery! I love the mood it creates, I've got the scene right in my mind. Great stuff!

i love this. everything about it is imperfectly perfect.

"they try to pull your foot from your mouth./needless to say, they/did not succeed."

excellent use of that figure of speech.

"night lights burn like fire in your eyes./ ragged as they are/ by thinking you're a god./" - oh i effing love that.

~kait