Great poem.

This is a really sweet poem. I liked the voice and how it seems really innocent. Is "he" the father? Well, don't tell me, because one unique quality of the poem is how you leave that out.

Just a couple spelling mistakes: "We walk straight t the candy aisle" and "Unpealing" (should be unpeeling)

But spelling in poetry doesn't really matter that much. Good job :)

Quite nice, has a sense of kindness.

Very sweet! Tell your sister to keep on writing. I expect to see her stuff in a book one day.

Melanie

That's so sweet! I love it! Please post more! Other than a few letters missing from words it's great! Feel free to look me up and have a look at some of my poems and stories. Thanks, ~zeusfluff~