lol, so true. we're all the same... immature. hahaha

keep writing!

Hi^_^this was a bit rough, harsh maybe, but i liked it a lot

good luck!yur a good writer (and im trying to write like someone whose real language is english... but it isn't really xD )

I love the format here.. it's cool and the piece is something we can all relate too

I wrote my first poem about a friend of mine, R&R it

great poem. i love the line 'you are my mirror (formed by water in the mud)' good job :)~dropsofjewpiter~

i don't think that it's so angry as hurt... at least, that's my take on it... this is good :D

xoxo~xan

Interested. Your style is rough, but not unpleasant. I like it. The one line I'm not so fond of is:

"abused, misused, mangled, disregarded, and unpleasant"

There's neither subject nor verb and it makes the sentence sound empty, almost meaningless. I guess I'd take it and try to put some life into it, or maybe just leave it as it is.

Nice poem. I enjoyed it.