I like the rythem.. how it just seems to spin around. The last lines are so disorienting. lovely!

Creepy...the beginning grabs the reader well. I like the short lines, it adds to the rhythm. The only line I think should be revised is the long one ("When is it?" they call to my), which could be segmented into two in order to fit the pattern. Nice job.

Intriguing ending.

I love the fantastical elements in this - the fairy-like presence and how you ended it with time not mattering. You have a very lively rhythm to your poetry, and a strong and unique voice. Keep it up.

Juliet.