Ok. You do realize that your 8th chapter is long overdue? If you don't update sometime soon...I am going to come after you!
I just love your story...and the characters...and I won't be able to sleep till I find out what happens in the end!
Your writing is extremely original...and I love the way you have used the old cliche!
Continue,please? And when is Milo coming back into the picture? I really loved his character...

You're right. I do love this. I can't wait to read on and see what happens to Lydia and...Milo? lol I love her mom took her shopping and she got a thong. Thats hilarious!

p.s. if you do like my story please remember to add it to Favorite Stories...I'm trying to get it out there cause not too many people know of it.

This is a really nice story so far~ I've never seen an older sister&younger brother story before (just a lot of younger sister&older brother... xD). This is pretty original, anｄ　Ｉ　ｌｉｋｅ　ｔｈｅ　ｃｈａｒａｃｔｅｒｓ　ａ　ｌｏｔ　ａｌｒｅａｄｙ．　︿＿︿；Ｕｐｄａｔｅ　ｓｏｏｎ，　ｐｌｅａｓｅ！:)

I very much like this story so far! :) the interaction between lydia and milo is cute. xD I've never seen an older girl/younger brother's best friend story on fp before -- lots of younger girl/older brother's best friend, though. :P

I hope you update sometime. :)

You did well with the characters, particularly Chase and Michelle. Their personalities were very evident despite the few words, especially in the dialogue.

The beginning wasn't too strong. It was a little choppy. Try to add some more description around dialogue.

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+ Nice intereaction between the two of them. It gives a lot of information about their past relationship, and does a good job setting up for the next chapter. Good job slipping in the thing about the bookshelf, too.

- I think I mentioned this in another review, but I'm not too fond of the all-flashback chapter. I feel that writing should always speak for itself, so if you have to mention at the beginning that it's all a flashback, then I feel that the writing isn't doing it's full job.

+ I like Chase. He's an interesting character and adds some comic relief to the story.

- "she gave herself over to a flashback of the night before" I didn't like this. It felt unnatural that she would succumb to a flashback. It seems like the type of thing that would happen in a movie, not reality, which I get the feeling is what you're going for. Maybe something more like "she thought back to the night before."

+ I liked the dialogue between them. It reflected both their past and present relationships and was a good transition between the two.

- I'm confused about the time in between the two chapters. Is this the first time she's run into him in a while? Otherwise, the whole sudden-realization-of-his-cuteness thing makes little sense. Yet it also makes little sense that they wouldn't see each other very often.

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I'm just going to keep my reviews to a + and a -, 'kay?

+ I like how you gave some insight into their past relationship. It contributes a lot of insight into the story and their relationship later on.

- This chapter could be misleading. It is very different from the rest of the chapters and new readers could think that it will all be like this.

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Wow, your story is addicting. I intended to read the first chapter and then skip to a later one, but I just kept reading. I figured I should take a break to review.

You've developed your characters very well so far. They each have a very distinct personality. This helps keep your story interesting, plus steers it away from the chliches that you're trying to avoid. I didn't get a very clear idea of Morgan's personality in this chapter, but I'm sure you do a great job of establishing it in the next few chapters.

The shifts in time felt choppy at times. You just stuck a large chunk of flashbacks in the middle of a chapter. The entirely flashback chater felt pretty strange, too. There's some good content in them, and they definately add a lot to the story, but they could use some smoothing out.

I really love how this is coming so far. Keep up the good work!

really great chapter, can't wait to read more. I'd write a better review but I'm to tired lol.

great

one thing im confused about...you said somewhere that they were seperated for 4 years...was that all three of them or were chase and lydia together and michelle away? update soon!

Good ol' Chase. Don't let that Morgan get anywhere near Lyds!

I can't wait to get Milo's reaction.
Great work,
E.

Why do you always call Chase the "Asian boy"? If he's Korean, call him the "Korean boy". Or would you call Milo the "European boy"?!?!?!