...Well snap. If you weren't intending grusomeness, you still managed it. The last line was good though, made it make some sense.
Cardboard box? Ouch.

Really good once again. I was thinking about submitting something too, mainly for the sake of want of reviews! >.< But anyway, great one here, what in the crap is it about?

I love the rhyming in this poem, it's nowhere near how badly generic my rhyming can get.

Yeah, isn't weird how you start our writing a poem thinking one way but it comes out completely different.

I like the gruesomeness in your poem though.

great poem. i love your writing style. good job :)~dropsofjewpiter~