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| Enaid 2007-04-19 ch 18,  | abusehm... interesting im pretty sure your sequel to this is out and being written arg! that means i will have to wait for updates at some point and that nice little forward button will disappear. i like that this epiloge leaves things open to wonder. Her baby is probably going to be very powerfull and interesting. im sad that so many people died, but i guess a new cast of characters will be nice. I wonder what happened to Laura/Beterize(the mean one)/the shy one (forget the 3 names lol) i guess they just went off and had convos w/ themselves... maybe they should show up again but with some boy that has a 3 way split personality!=) cant wait to read more taa taa for now |
| Enaid 2007-04-19 ch 14, | abuseGO SARRA! she's a beast killing three evil beings at once. has she even had any magic training? |
| Enaid 2007-04-19 ch 13, | abusedouble wedding, shape shifting dog, and split personality this story just gets better and better! |
| Enaid 2007-04-19 ch 11, | abusehaha soon everyone in the royal household will be leaving with them. anyway i like having more characters added! great now... off to read more |
| Enaid 2007-04-18 ch 6, | abuseya! im so glad liam and sarra are no longer together they just are not right for each other... thinking about paul and marc now i like marc the best but dont know much about paul |
| Jesse Prano 2006-05-30 ch 18, | abuseWow... what an insanely awesome story and ending... it literally gave me the chills, the ending... heh, great job |
| Sari La Elfa 2006-05-29 ch 18, | abuseHey! this Fantasy is wonerful!! really great! ther´s a second part, isn´t it? i want to read it now!! |
| Every Thought 2006-03-29 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting plotline. You seem to be very talented when it comes to twisting the story in different ways. I plan to read more when I have the time... Every Thought |
| Fantasygirl721 2006-03-21 ch 18, | abuseVery interesting story. I must admit that the polt line is very interesting, but your actual writing needs a little work. At times the story seemed to drag, at others it seemed to go too fast. I think you pacing of the story could use a little work. I also think a little more description would have helped, not only of the surroundings but of the various uses of magic. (The only one that was really in detail was Heather's, though even that was a little vauge)It also would have been easier to understand if you had explained your concept of magic more completly, since alot of people have various veiws of magic and it's applications. I think you have lots of talent and could really do well, but I think you should add more discriptions. Also I think the Christianity part didn't really fit or have a purpose. The magic is a gift from God is an interesting concept, but it doesn't really fit in, unless it comes into play more in a sequel. I am not saying anything against Christianity, but it doesn't really fit here. I really like you work and hope you continue to write about Sarra and Marc, and I hope I haven't insulted you. I am just offering friendly advice cause I think that you can do alot with your writing. Keep it up. Fanastygirl721 |
| jikap 2006-03-19 ch 18, | abusei really liked how this story ended up beeing a prequal of some sort, hopefully you're gonna follow up on this... right? |
| Sari La Elfa 2006-03-14 ch 1, | abusehey it´s good! how lond do you take to add mre chaps? |