Reviews for Two shots of sugar

Reviews For: Two shots of sugar

Farrie 2006-04-02 ch 1,	abuseAww.. sweet. I like it! Makes me think of chocolate...
fairEtales 2006-03-26 ch 1,	abuseI love it. You are talented...keep it up.
xHannahx 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abusehmm. i know what you mean, but then you can go back to the ancient greek idea that there are many different kinds of love (romantic love, love of family, love of things etc) so in one sense, people are perfectly ok to say they "love" things. though yeah, as you say, maybe it is a little gratuitous. as for the poem (im getting there...) i like the speed portrayed in the second stanza (maybe cos i know the feeling so well!) and the general sugar-high feel of the piece. m... sugar :P Han.
The Fourth Fate 2006-03-19 ch 1,	abuseO wow. The format and the way everything fit together... Unbelieveable. I love this. The author's note was really cool.
method acting 2006-03-18 ch 1,	abuseRight. Interesting. I adore the last stanza. So interesting. You really use the formatting to your advantage. I love it when writers do that. Really, the presentation is so much and you totally control that. I like that, "simplybreathtaking until you have no air left"That's so catchy and interesting. Great job.
mizu no kokoro 2006-03-16 ch 1,	abusehaha, its hard to know, when you love something or truly feel love...(?) i'm not making much sense. oh well, great poem, as always^^ keep writing!
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-03-16 ch 1,	abuseHehe a half-** of epic proportions =oP Hehe. Aye words can be annoying AND be taken for granted, which is what makes the English language something of a twunt. Oh well. Great shizzle! xhXix (PS I love you Unca, and I meanz it!)
Moondog Dozier 2006-03-16 ch 1,	abuseWonderful flow and sentiment. Kind of floats down the page. Well written.
breezy nostrils 2006-03-15 ch 1,	abusehaha the second stanza was amusing. i can't say that i say i love something a lot. but the poem is delicious and sugary. nice work.
Faithless Juliet 2006-03-14 ch 1,	abuseOh my god I LIKE TOTALLY LOVE IT! It’s hard not to say love, or like - it’s amazing, it’s magnanimous, and it’s so high-minded . I just like it, what more do you want. I do see what you’re saying though; I get reviews (and I‘m sure a lot of people do as well) that just say “I loved it” or “loved this one!” And I can’t help but ask myself “Why?” As I read them. Why do you like something, what about it moves you enough to proclaim that you love it? I guess I can understand both sides of that equation. (One-shot) it’s like a story - short - that is posted and done; nicknamed so people will know/not question it’s continuation... right? (All been stuffed into a few sugared sentences.) - I really “get” where this is coming from (I think) it’s like in poetry you have to have those killer lines, or dead stop metaphor’s that make you think “Wow, I’ve never thought of it like that before!” You have to have a system and a structure; otherwise it’s just words that kind of make sense as a whole but resemble thoughts on paper more then anything else. You have to have those quote un quote sugared sentences to sweeten or enhance the mold of what you’re saying just to get people’s attention. Kind of like when you start reading a book and that first sentence has to grab you otherwise you’re like “Who cares?” I think all forms of writing need to be like that to - fiction - as well as poetry - even songs. "really"love,so much thatI can't tell you(enough). - Again goes back to the whole (TELL ME WHY?) aspect... So why do I like this piece? As per your usual it has a tone - a very “you” tone, like I have no idea who you are in real life but if you put me in a room with a hundred poems I would probably be able to pick one out and say (Yes, this is a MentallyMigrated masterpiece) and even though this is being cocky and cynical it still sounds soft and organic when I read it. It’s hard to pin point - good reviews can be good and bad and the same goes with bad reviews. Like Sylvia Plath only ever got bad reviews for her poetry and look at them now - still kicking in formal Lady Lazarus style. Maybe it’s just in the fact that they’re reading it that makes the (oh my god I loved it’s) worth while. I (liked) it. Juliet.
Aquafied 2006-03-14 ch 1,	abuseso much thatI can't tell you(enough).-amazingly clear, i must say, i wish life was so. but is it something or someone, because people so overuse the notion of such things or use it so sparingly, they dont learn to love the right sort of things and leave many deserving possibilites to dry out in the wind (sugar gets awfully strong if you have to much of it, metaphorically spoken)
White Tea and Ginger 2006-03-14 ch 1,	abuse'wristbone-minds' ^ I like that phrase. Very..interesting. And I like the concept, too. A lot. Very cool idea, well put into words.
chaos called creation 2006-03-14 ch 1,	abuseReally like the title. Reminds me of that song by matt dusk. hm yea it's a bit small and strange. There's something off about this piece though... it doesn't seem to have what your other pieces have, but that's just my opinion.

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