Reviews for Crystalline Flaws

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Bombaykoneko 2008-04-13 ch 9,	abuseOkay, I've just started reading this. I really like your other works so I'm patiently reading and waiting for more. But I have to say, I really hope Jain develops more character soon. So far he's been 1 dimensional: overprotective growl growl growl scowl he-man. Not that he-man doesn't have his purposes but it does get very annoying. Sometimes I just roll my eyes and go, jain, SHUT UP already. In this particular chapter Eravan and Reiten has shown more character to their beings. I was beginning to dislike Reiten as a little whiny baby. But I really like Eravan now! And Tarek. So, as I'm just on ch. 10 right now, I'll continue to be patient, but I really hope Jain gets some more facets to his character soon!
Seque Me ad Meum Somnium 2007-11-23 ch 21,	abuseI need an update. Seriously. Life or death matter. And please don't send Teyran back with the king. I like Shalei better. Really. I want alot of sappy takiing-care-of-each-other action going on, kay? Thanks a ton. Oh, and BTW, hun, great story. The characters are really well developed and more complex than many other's I've read. Can't say I'm too fond of constantly changing POVs but that is just me, probably. Do keep it up : p
izziexxx 2007-06-19 ch 1,	abuseRight just to say I haven't finished this yet and though what I’ve read is wonderful I just want to mention something. This is very long! I put it into word unformatted it moved it to size ten and then put it in reading view (which on my monitor makes it about the same word count per page used in books) this is actually about 360 book pages worth of work here, and it's your own work, and it's not finished even. You could get this properly published i recon. Or maybe I’m just mad Yeah I’ll go with the latter... As I said this is novel size so it might take me a while to read but I’ll leave a proper review when I’ve finished.
Nikerym 'Ksherea 2006-12-31 ch 1,	abusetesting, since FP isn't sending out author alerts
Terra Fire 2006-10-30 ch 20,	abuseThis is a great story, I love it. I didn't think I would like the whole brother slash thing, but my perverted mind loves it! I have to say though, the couple I like better than Keir/Jain would have to be Eravan and Tarek, they're absolutly wonderful together. I also hope that Teyren and Shalei get together again soon. I really like the story plot too. I'm very interested in the king, and what he's up to. Also, I wonder if there was more between Teyren and the king. Anyway, I've got to get going. Can't wait for another chapter. ;} ~VGT~ (Oh, and I also put your story in my C2, I hope you don't mind.)
SarryMatts 2006-10-29 ch 20,	abusewell, its stupidly late, I should be in bed...but I had to just drop you a review to tell you that this is still one of the best stories I've read in ages and I'm now a die hard Keir/Jain fan. I also discovered that you were actually a couple of chapters ahead on your live journal thingy (cos I only just clicked on the home page link) and I added you on there...though you'll probably work that out. ...and this is the end of the worse review ever written. ~sarry
salt and pepper 2006-10-25 ch 20,	abuseLol, I registered on the site so I could review ^-^;; First of all, just have to say that I love this, and have been reading it every chance I've had since finding it a couple of days ago. I really wanted to read it slow and make it last, but I just couldn't stop! Keir and Jain are definately my favourite couple in the story, despite the fact that they're brothers. I think that maybe if it were in real life I'd be a bit more uncomfortable with it, but you write it really well so that their relationship is just really sweet and endearing. I dunno, it's just cute. Reiten and Fiohste are my next favourites. I also love the fact that they're both so sweet and caring with each other. I'm not too sure about Tarek and Eravan. I don't know why really. Sometimes I like them, sometimes I don't. Teyren and Shalai I never really got into until now when they're fighting. Now I really want them to get back together. The world you have created and the magic and everything is really interesting and believable. The plot is always interesting and romance is always great too ^_^ I've really enjoyed the whole story so far, and can't wait for what's to come. Sorry the long review, lol. But I felt I had to let you know how much I love reading this. Thanks for writing this and sharing it with everyone. Keep up the great work!
ToEatTheseApplesFromYourEye... 2006-09-22 ch 18,	abuseWhy didn't they test Ralek? Man oh man I'm glad that he and Eravan finally hooked up!
Shinji-Fukushima 2006-08-09 ch 16,	abuseI have really enjoyed your story so far. I hope you continue to write it especially since you have left it off at a semi-suspenseful part. I tend to not review but I thought if I did it might help to inspire you to add the new chapter soon which I am hoping is true. Love and keep up the good work I look forward to reading more. Shinji
SarryMatts 2006-08-03 ch 16,	abuseI fell into that lurking habit and decided that I should leave a review to tell you I’m still reading and that this story is still awesome. That, and I don’t have anything better to do than to fill your inbox full of ramblings. That was one hell of a plot twist to throw in there like that but it helps explain some of the reasoning behind the war, to me it’s like he’s lashed out at them because of losing Tey like that. Shalei and Tey are being dumb though, Shalei should have listened to him before shouting at him and sulking and Tey should have thought about how Shalei would take hearing it. The way they’re acting gives me the urge to throw my hands up in the air and do that muttering thing, going on about the stupidity of the male species. I have to admit at first I was a bit unsure about the Keir/Jain relationship, incest not being something I usually read, but after having the chance to see them interact together more I think they’re incredibly sweet and glad you put them in there together. They’re definitely the best couple in here. Eravan and Tarek confuse me, I can’t work out if they’re interested in each other, if they’re just playing a game, if Tarek is playing and Eravan likes him or…eck…maybe I should stop reading into it and just wait to see how things go. There are too many best lines and moments but I’m going to have to say Keir is currently my favourite character – mainly because of how he’s been acting around Jain at the moment and Jain comes in close second. Can’t wait to read more, I’ve missed this story so much. ~Serena
Hell's first Icicle 2006-08-02 ch 16,	abuseoh, come ON! you've got to update faster than that! im dying here! breaks down and cries UPDATE! you're amazing. i'm srs. i was waiting everyday hoping for an update in mi inbox from you and wen it came i was SO happy, and now you leave me with yet another cliffie! damn it, i wanna noe wat happens next! l0lz. i just reread that and i sound so whiny...heh,i guess im just desperate. this is a brilliant story, and i can't wait for more! ~Emz-_-v
dio.is.broken 2006-07-21 ch 15,	abuseInteresting story. Aside from several parts where the action is unclear, and character motivations (believability) are suspect, it's fairly well written. I like how you shift around a lot to keep the story moving, but in some cases I think that works against you, I felt cheated on more than one occasion--especially during some of the large unexplained time gaps. I think you would also benefit greatly by using just a little bit more description to go along with your dialogue. For example, you rely a lot on 'he looked smug' 'a smug grin of his lips' ' snorted', but you fail to put much else. I can count on one page at least five '* snorted'. Try varying how you describe your characters. I was beginning to believe I was reading about a bunch of pigs. You've got a great talent as a writer, I look forward to future chapters. Good luck.
Xemas 2006-07-17 ch 15,	abuseAh! Update! haha, it took me three days to read this, but only because my parents wouldn't let me on sighs i kept getting to the really good parts of the story and then they'd kick me off. Now there's a good part and it cut off!! ^__^ Great job so far and I can't wait for an update!
sarahnali 2006-07-13 ch 15,	abuseUm...I'm not sure if you know this already but it looks like you forgot chapter 13. Can't wait to read more...you've got me hooked to your stories, I think I''ve probably went through all your poasted ones on FP in two days time.
Desdemona-Snape 2006-06-21 ch 15,	abuseAll I have to say is wow. (okay I lied...I gots more stuff to say) This is an amazing story and I can't wait until you update...and may I ask why there is no Part 13? ~Mewscutestfan325~

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