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Her Wishing Well 2007-03-03 . chapter 1
Beautifully written and really sad.
Holly Rose E 2006-04-06 . chapter 1
"emotions-technically bitter", i dont know why but I think that was my favorite line out of its entirety.. It was all magnificent.
Unready 2006-03-31 . chapter 1
pleasing to the mind and soul
simpleplan13 2006-03-30 . chapter 1
sad and very well written
Written 2006-03-29 . chapter 1
you scattered about me. wow. that was beautiful. I love the form as well.
classic violet 2006-03-21 . chapter 1
Interesting. I love that last line. 'scattered' just seems to fit so well.
eden is burning 2006-03-20 . chapter 1
i imagine the make-believeto be attainable yet

in the mornings i cry,

Amazingly great. Just a brilliant poem.
Chemically Induced 2006-03-20 . chapter 1
i really like your poetry. its fragmented, full of original, illegal-feeling word combinations. quintessential free-verse. awesome. you're the first truly skilled talented poet i've come across on fpress.so this is +1 fan, for you. namarie.

love, c.induced.
poetic abortion 2006-03-19 . chapter 1
beautiful, vague, entrancing. (you had me at hello - giggles, heart worthy.)

~* noelle
beti213 2006-03-19 . chapter 1
"i imagine the make-believe to be attainable yet" lamentation of poets everywhere! I love this-it has a stripped-down feel, where each word counts. disallusioned youth at its literary best. well done.
Hax Rook 2006-03-16 . chapter 1
i. if only we knew that anywhere is inevitably somewhere.ii. maybe dulling is important when i get there?i. dig that.

crisp and real but not drowned in blood and teen agony.let me know if you attain. please.
Aquafied 2006-03-15 . chapter 1
i imagine the make-believeto be attainable.- and invisible optional?

ah, i love that, amazing, amazing

makes me want to run the streets and pretend everything is a poorly written script with bad animationlike it
she wants revenge 2006-03-15 . chapter 1
beautiful work. vague, but entrancing. brilliant. loved it.
Drops of Jewpiter 2006-03-14 . chapter 1
Great poem. i love your writing style. good job :)~dropsofjewpiter~
Autumn tears 2006-03-14 . chapter 1
Interesting form (I liked the use of roman numerals)

Definitely gives the feeling of progression, either through time or emotionally. Great divisions, few people can pull that off.
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