Beautifully written and really sad.

"emotions-technically bitter", i dont know why but I think that was my favorite line out of its entirety.. It was all magnificent.

pleasing to the mind and soul

sad and very well written

you scattered about me. wow. that was beautiful. I love the form as well.

Interesting. I love that last line. 'scattered' just seems to fit so well.

i imagine the make-believeto be attainable yet

in the mornings i cry,

Amazingly great. Just a brilliant poem.

i really like your poetry. its fragmented, full of original, illegal-feeling word combinations. quintessential free-verse. awesome. you're the first truly skilled talented poet i've come across on this is 1 fan, for you. namarie.

love, .

beautiful, vague, entrancing. (you had me at hello - giggles, heart worthy.)

* noelle

"i imagine the make-believe to be attainable yet" lamentation of poets everywhere! I love this-it has a stripped-down feel, where each word counts. disallusioned youth at its literary best. well done.

i. if only we knew that anywhere is inevitably . maybe dulling is important when i get there?i. dig that.

crisp and real but not drowned in blood and teen me know if you attain. please.

i imagine the make-believeto be attainable.- and invisible optional?

ah, i love that, amazing, amazing

makes me want to run the streets and pretend everything is a poorly written script with bad animationlike it

beautiful work. vague, but entrancing. brilliant. loved it.

Great poem. i love your writing style. good job :)dropsofjewpiter

Interesting form (I liked the use of roman numerals)

Definitely gives the feeling of progression, either through time or emotionally. Great divisions, few people can pull that off.