Ah. Everyone needs to breathe, indeed, and this is a breath of fresh air.
I like the italics-instead-of-quotations. I'm a personal proponent of changing grammar rules because it works.
The ending is...it's a little bit sad, but it's profound, too.
It lets you wonder and hope about what happens to them...

Wow :) This was so natural, it was just, well, amazing.

this was amazing.
it just is.

there's no real connection between some of the paragraphs - they're just observations of things that happen.
but they tie together so perfectly to show someone so perfectly flawed.

if i had an ideal-but-horribly-skewed relationship, it would be like this.

it's so amazing, so beautiful.
congratulations; you've written a miracle.

Seems pretty neutral to me. I think you accomplished your goal of it 'just be'-ing. I liked it too. I liked the last lines. "Everyone needs to breathe". Cute. Well done!

Beautifully written. I love that you captured the feeling of a loveless romance. You also did really well with the druggie vibe. Nice job.

I like. :)
People are always writing boy slash, but I just never see female slash. It makes me sad. ;-;
I'm glad to see one person writing some!
Thankees!
*HUG*

Everyone needs to breath. -> I love it. :) Wonderful piece.

Well, even if you're not sure if you like this, I certainly do. It's incredibly real, and honest, even if the ending isn't happy or sad or anything.

"You're not important... Easily replaceable. Common, like air."
"Everyone needs to breathe."

Those lines are AMAZING.

k.X

I like this a lot, though it does make me sort of sad.

i love this story. i think not having quotation marks works really well. i also agree with the just be idea. i think you really made that happen.

I must say this is one of my fav pieces by you.

I'm not sure if I like it either.

It's rather fitting that you got sick of quote marks and used that on this story, because if you did have them, I have a feeling it would spoil the atmosphere and take away the film noir-esque feel it has for me right now.

I love the comeback at the end. It's great.

The only problem I have is your tendency to repeat words multiple times in the same sentence instead of finding an alternative. It's a personal preference thing. If I read it analytically, it *does* serve to enhance the reading experience, but, as it were, I wasn't reading it analytically.

For some reason, I absolutely adore the way there are no quotation marks in this. I think it enhances the idea of the drugs.

Oh wow. I like it, short and interesting and sweet. :]

wow, i really like this..and the clincher is divine. nice job.