love. just, love for the entire piece. itissoperfect. that last line is a stunner. honestly.

~* noelle

im glad you did because this was worth reading. lovely job.

Hey little sister, what have you done. Hey little sister, who's your only one. Hey little sister, who's your superman. Hey little sister, SHOTGUN.

Great song.

Twisted. Clever. Quite an appealing read.

A good flow, although the way you broke the lines up is odd to me.

The subject matter though makes me wonder what might go through your head. Just a little creepy.

nice job. Keep writing!