|Reviews for girls in blue|
| tonight we bloom 7/14/09 . chapter 1
Last stanza was just BREATHTAKING. I don't know how you do it!
I envy your talent.
Grammar issue in the second stanza: it should be "all i see/ are those grey pools"
| beti213 3/20/06 . chapter 1
a few outwardly cool things about this poem: the erratic rhyming and the format (like water!) a few inwardly cool things about this poem: the willingness to completely surrender... it's so scary, but somehow liberating. this is a great piece visually and emotionally. love it.
| bahaghari 3/20/06 . chapter 1
Nice imagery powerful emotions good work.
| dark stars grace 3/19/06 . chapter 1
the last stanza is breath-takingly perfect. a whirlwind of emotion, captured so well.
| poetic abortion 3/19/06 . chapter 1
perfect, just perfect. this will never leave me.
| classic violet 3/18/06 . chapter 1
wow. I adore this. It's just so... magnificent. so simple & yet so elegant. perhaps torturous. but it is so beautiful.
| youzi 3/17/06 . chapter 1
loved how the final stanza drew it all together... how the line 'you always liked me better blue' seems to have many meanings (at least, to me). do keep writing :D
| breakme 3/16/06 . chapter 1
this is really good. "echos against the glass slipped tragedies locked inside your bedroom walls" is the best verse. And the ending leaves an impression.
| lackluster 3/16/06 . chapter 1
beautiful. i like the rhyme scheme, the flow.
| Jacqueline Stem 3/16/06 . chapter 1
Oh man, the last stanza is amazing. Well, so is the rest of the poem, but the last stanza is the (making up some words here) most amazingnest.
| Neko-Lu 3/16/06 . chapter 1
| she wants revenge 3/16/06 . chapter 1
beautiful. loved it.
| Moondog Dozier 3/16/06 . chapter 1
Wonderful phrase work, and word placement. End lines were excellent. Great work.
| bright horizon splash 3/15/06 . chapter 1
"echos against glass slipped tragedies." fantastic.
| ode to a firefly 3/15/06 . chapter 1
I absolutely adore the last stanza. You did a wonderful job!