Last stanza was just BREATHTAKING. I don't know how you do it!

I envy your talent.

Grammar issue in the second stanza: it should be "all i see/ are those grey pools"

a few outwardly cool things about this poem: the erratic rhyming and the format (like water!) a few inwardly cool things about this poem: the willingness to completely surrender... it's so scary, but somehow liberating. this is a great piece visually and emotionally. love it.

Nice imagery powerful emotions good work.

the last stanza is breath-takingly perfect. a whirlwind of emotion, captured so well.

perfect, just perfect. this will never leave me.

* noelle

wow. I adore this. It's just so... magnificent. so simple & yet so elegant. perhaps torturous. but it is so beautiful.

loved how the final stanza drew it all together... how the line 'you always liked me better blue' seems to have many meanings (at least, to me). do keep writing :D

this is really good. "echos against the glass slipped tragedies locked inside your bedroom walls" is the best verse. And the ending leaves an impression.

beautiful. i like the rhyme scheme, the flow.

Oh man, the last stanza is amazing. Well, so is the rest of the poem, but the last stanza is the (making up some words here) most amazingnest.

:O amazing!

beautiful. loved it.

Wonderful phrase work, and word placement. End lines were excellent. Great work.

"echos against glass slipped tragedies." fantastic.

I absolutely adore the last stanza. You did a wonderful job!

Christine