I knew when she was first introduced that I would like Delacroix. I wouldn’t have made the same choice as Reed though, as I am far too paranoid.

“Oops Malevolence, she died of internal injuries after the battle…..”

But hey it seems to have came up as a good idea for him though.

I love the Hypocrisy of the Cutler regime, so slimy. Mal might be one of my favorite characters in this story…. Weird. This is getting better and better.

Chap 10.

Incredible chapter,

Particularly creeped out by the reeducation centers and their personnel.

This reminds me more of Squadron Supreme and The Authority more and more, where the Heroes are as unhinged and psychotic as the villains they fight.

I like how Reed got into Ultra’s head.

Wow Reed iced up another top hero he has to stop this before he become number one with a bullet on the governments hit list.

The writing is really good, I could see this in book stores, or audiobook. Great project you have here. I am really enjoying all the characters, From Culter, to Moore, to Trauma. Not just the main characters. Man it’s a bleak world though.

I had guessed right about the identity of the Raptor too, amusing fellow.

I have to say, this story was awesome. You set it up for a sequel, Kill Bill style, and threw in plenty of references. Ever heard of a game called "Deus Ex?" Since you're a "Thief" fan, it has many of the same minds behind it. (Bioshock may be another one worth checking out). The superheroes and politics were well done, and it's always good to read about an anti-hero who fights with his mind more than mindless strength. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff!

Lot of action this chapter, and things get more interesting. The story's well edited and paced. Looking forward to reading more.

Very interesting story so far. As for Reed, he reminds me of Solid Snake and Sam Fisher from Metal Gear and Splinter Cell. A lot of his urban movements resemble parkour. I hope there will be some rooftop chase scenes later on. Facing both the fascist government and other criminals looks like a very awesome setup!

Oliver's ruthlessness was a bit disturbing but I find it makes me like the character even more. I wonder what that says about me though... hm.

Good Chapter!

This is just quality work. Top notch, I am really enjoying the world you are painting.

I am enjoying all of the characters. Especially Malevolence, It's all turning out so well.

This story reminds me in some ways of Wanted. Secret Cabals and Represive Governments. A great setting.(The Graphic Novel not the movie, which is a good thing.)

I'll certainly give the other stories a look, this one in particular makes mine look, well, just bad really. I meant random concerning, amongst other things, being the Prime Minister of Iceland (though I own and live aboard the world's largest turtle) and the mention of cake molestation (whatever floats your boat)

Exceptional! Truly exceptional! A brilliantly constructed story (also refreshing to know that you are almost as random as me).

(Note that this review is for the whole story, not just this chapter)

That was...exquisite. To a comic-nerd such as myself, that was an absolutely fantastic read. Brilliantly written, with interesting characters, a world I could really imagine, and a strong theme of vigilantes and fascism that for me evoked airs of Watchmen and V For Vendetta.

The characters are so cool. I genuinely liked Oliver Reed/The Wraith, and Raptor was ace (and a lot like Batman in description).

Honestly, this had me captivaed all the way through. An excellent piece of work, and something to be proud of. You should get it published properly as a comic or 'just' a novel-I for one would certainly pay good money for a copy if I saw this in my local bookstore.

I cannot praise this highly enough! Really great work.

Hello, John.

Well, you have created a fascinating universe here. Sure, I can see many of the influences you mentionned, but the combination is unique.

In WRAITH, we have an interesting and likeable protagonist-I mean, a thief and a killer in a fascist state would have to be a good guy, right. He's like a mix of Simon Templar and Spider-Man...or something. Very cool.

When time allows, I will continue reading and reviewing this work. I would definitely pay for this were it a comic or a novel.

I took the time to read this after reading the first five chapters of Centurion and I'm glad I did. This has got to be one of the best things I've read on this site or otherwise. The characters were interesting with their own unique flaws and the plot was intruging and the ending left plenty of room for a sequel, which I hope to see. And Trauma's awesome, glad he didn't die.

I'm very glad I somehow stumbled onto your work.

Having read through this entire thing in a couple of days I can say you should look into getting yourself an agent. This story in and of itself is highly publishable even with the inclusion of 'super heroes'. It's extremely well written with a good solid pace.

The only things I noticed, and you even made mention of it in the last bit of chap. 24, is your characterization of female characters.

Admittedly this is a super hero world so they're all going to be gorgeous but they seemed mostly flash and very little substance. However, you relegated them enough to background characters that it did not affect the story over-much.

Congrats on a well written tale. I'm eagerly awaiting whatever else you put out for the populace's consumption.

~C. Hinton

Wow that was simply wonderful, a weaving tale of cunning trickery and deceit. I Can't wait to read the rest of your works, and will look forward to new pieces that you write as well.

Once again, Wonderful one of those stories that kept me up all night reading

Excellent! That's basically all I have said. I've been following this story for quite a while... a year? And it's extremely gratifying to see it finished in suitable fashion, and I was slightly amused to see that Garrett was the inspiration for Oliver because like you, I think Thief is one of the all time greatest games ever. The world is just damn interesting.