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| Confido 2008-01-01 ch 9,  | abuseI just read this and its really good. heh, the strange thing is though, my name is Annie, I have brown hair and brown eyes, I have a brother, named Andrew. heh. But moving on... Like I said, its really good. I hope you continue |
| Estelin 2006-10-06 ch 9, | abuseHEy this is a really great story will there be more soon. |
| spydercrystal 2006-04-18 ch 9, | abuseYou're big on Death, Britney Spears and Teen Pregnancy, aren't you? |
| Gibygi 2006-03-26 ch 9, | abuseAwesome! Update soon! |
| Gibygi 2006-03-25 ch 7, | abusePretty good! |
| HannahMarie*Willow 2006-03-22 ch 6, | abuseGood story, I like this. I really like the characters. Update soon |
| HannahMarie*Willow 2006-03-22 ch 1, | abuseIts an interesting story with likeable characters. There's just one big concern. You said at the beginning:"I look like my mother with brown eyes, white-blonde hair, and dimples".Yet later on:"Mom is very pretty. She’s got this soft, brown hair and brown eyes, and great skin, and a lovely smile". Please try and clarify this. TIA |
| StuckInTwilight 2006-03-22 ch 6, | abuseAww, This is so sad, and yet, i love it, its really good, I can't wait to read more! |
| Gibygi 2006-03-21 ch 5, | abuseCool. I thought she really had a miscarriage. Lol, but when I went back I saw it. You fooled me! Lol Great job! |
| Gibygi 2006-03-19 ch 4, | abuseUh oh! Scary! Lol. Pretty good chapter, I guess. |
| Amaya san 2006-03-19 ch 4, | abuseThis is an interesting fiction story so far. I applaud you for actually paying attention to spelling and grammar. I know a lot of people do, but still. It's nice to see people writing how they should. Anyway, keep up the good work. I'll be looking forward to reading future chapters. x.key.x |
| A.A-H.L 2006-03-19 ch 4, | abuseOh wow that drama! This is a great story, keep up the great work! Kudos |
| StepfordShipper 2006-03-19 ch 1, | abuseI really like this story keep up the good work! :) |
| Gibygi 2006-03-18 ch 3, | abuseFirst of all, great job! You have a great story going. I noticed one thing throughout the story that bothered me a little. When Annie writes in her diary (or journal, whatever), she doesn't seem to have much emotion. It seems to me that if someone lost their sister and was killed by her mother, then the trauma of finding out she's pregnant, and moving to California, that they would have a lot more emotion. I don't know. It just seems like the story would be better if you tried to add a little bit more emotion. Besides that, great job! I'm really looking forward to reading more! |
| Female-fighter 2006-03-17 ch 1, | abuseNot bad, I hope you update soon I want to see what happens next. Everything seems alright spelling and grammar wise so keep up the good work. |