Aww. what a sweet poem. This made me smile. I liked the near end line with the kool-aid stand. It gives the cliched version of the image a more original spin.

oh god. 'never never land' that's so pretty and beautiful. 'kingdom&kool-aid stands' i love that... this is lovely. my dream.

Beautiful, simply beautiful. The innocence is undeniable and touching. I really really like this...especially the Never never land part. good job!

Just beautiful.

"eclipsing her sun in utter blackness"

Ahh, ohmygod, I adore that line! so pretty.

What a fun piece.I like the way the rhythm of this piece makes me feel like dancing! Nice use of imagery, even if I, the reader, am as far from knowing where this came from as you! do keep writing :D

aw...'tis a prettyful poem

keep writing ^.~

I just really like this. It's so...simple.