'He folds me up like a letter in an envelope,/waiting to send me somewhere foreign and exotic -' Lovely and I think it's unique. My favourite bit. Well done.

That's soo beautiful! I love the first two lines the most.

This has great flow and rhythm and you chose words that perfectly capture the meaning of your poem. Wonderful write.

I think the last 2 lines would be better like:

"Lying in his bed, the music and the broken sunlight and soft lips;

I can lie here forever, together, safe."

"this is perfection" can be omitted because the readers obviously understand this.

Otherwise, this was a fantastic poem and I look forward to reading more of your work! You obviously have exceptional talent.

I would love opinions on my work from a writer like you, it would really mean a lot.

I would tell you how great this is but 36 other people already have, so that's really nothing new.

I will tell you however, contrary to another reviewer's opinion, that when writing poetry you should capitalize whatever goddamn letters you feel like, and whoever cares enough to disagree needs to go read some E. .

Frankly, I'm disappointed. I have read all of your poems and now all I can do is wait for the next one, haha.

hey! i decided to check out your page and i'm glad i did. this poem is so cute. i can never get the details right when i want to write something like this. ahh, this is amazing! instantly adding to my favs! love the way you described his lips, especially. they're one of my favorite things about a man

This is good, i like the flow of it.

This is beautiful and interesting. I like the envelope image.

it sounds gripping, as if love is an adventure.

Aw, I liked this. Very sweet. ] I'm sorry I didn't review back sooner-life gets in the way sometimes, I think. Keep it up ]

This ones my favorite! I like your way of conveying your feelings.

Beautiful poem. I love the emotion in it. Keep writing...

"Lying in his bed, the music and the broken sunlight and soft lips;

this is perfection and I can lie here forever, together, safe."

I simply love those two lines d:) Great job!

it's so cute

i relate to this

Sweet poem. Reminds me of my boyfriend. I like how you captured the whole imagery of it. Nicely presented.

konnichi wa

Sweet. It was something fluffy to read, and though I usually don't do fluffy, this was beautiful. The imagery there was absolutely perfect. :) Kudos.

Zaijen

-Shan-

gorgeous imagery. x