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| Damaged 2006-04-16 ch 1,   | Absolutely beautiful poem!! I'm so going to have to read more of your writings! |
| she's not breathing 2006-03-18 ch 1, | you missed an apostrophe in the second line. i like how fast this moves, it really progressed from each line to the next. love the repetition, & the emotion (& your pen name). but i think this poem is a little disjointed. when you talk about nightmares, then being lost, then chains to that backdrop of need&lust - it just doesn't fit that well to me. still, good job. hehe. ~kait |