Nice poem.

~Twilight Starr~

I like this a lot. The story it tells is very haunting...your imagery is amazing, and I love the repetition of certain words and lines, especially "I just don't understand." Keep up the great work!

"i just dont understand your riddles"...that line just rings out very well to me..i can totally relate to this...and your descriptions are really rich like the "crushing silver-sequined skirts stained with burgundy"...very good job...

trul yours...

beautifully crushing.

love, val

i love this.nice use of imagery and figurative language.

demanding, yet vulnerable.

the tone, the style: it makes me fall in love (shallow, i know). beautiful work, i just ADORE this. (and i rarely use caps anymore, it seems, so that means *something*).

~* noelle

wow, I love this. The repetition sounds fantastic. I just really like the Alice-through-the-looking-glass feel of this, the lilting twisted magic kind of tone. There's a contrast between the lucidity of the writing and the general strangeness of the character and their created world that's really interesting and makes it a delight to read. Great stuff!

or why you like to give broken glass prisms-prisms are amazingly beautiful. really and truly

i am jested and astounded.i like

"or why your laugh sounds like death"

I love that.

And the roses//blood, skirts//breath, glass//scarves... Gah, beautiful.

wow, i like the tone of this, mysterious and troubling, good work

keep writing!