He's got issues. You've got issues. We've all got issues! WOOHOO let's dance! lol Okay, I'm probably sufficiently wierding you out now...and you're thinking *who is the freak with the messed up head...and she's trying to say that I'M messed up?!?* lol Ah, go ahead, I don't care. Okay, bye-bye!

-Megan

Wow. Crepy.

Hm that's kinda random... *I think I'm just gonna go rndomly show up at this other creeps house who's just like me!! PARTY!* lol

WHAT THE HECK IS WRONG WITH YOUR BRAIN?!?!?!?!?! lol I mean that in the best way possible... XD lol Where did you get this idea? I mean seriously...just sitting there *hm...i think I'm gonna write a story about some creepy little dude that grows from a tree and then goes around eating all the little buttmunches* I mean REALLY...you've GOT to be insane... I wanna meet you! ^.^ lol

Is it wierd that I almost feel sorry for him? Um okay... moving on. *yes, I'm crazy :D*

um. What the heck lol. He just gobbles him up? Just like that? WHAT. THE. HECK. *gobble gobble* lol hey! that sounds like a turkey! ROFL wOw...I'm in a really random mood... O.o Okay, bye-bye XD

kay... the descriptions are good, but i'm a little lost. are we missing something here?

Okay...there's a little shimmer of a plot but come on, if you're going to write a story write more! And learn how to show us and not tell us. Use some similes, some metaphors. Hey, I have an insane killer and you have a non-sexual Jeff Dahmer...there is a difference.

Anyways, you really have some writing issues and I'm flattered you like my reviews but I'm smashing your story, how can you like that? I just don't like the voice in your writing, it's not like you could write an entire book this way...try to read some books like this to see how the author writes and try to copy the style. It's hard and I hate doing it but eventually you settle into your own style...sometimes it's good, sometimes it sucks...and sometimes it's just creepy. Try reading my rewrites of Angel of the Crimson Halo or Broken Wings That Never Mend...they have my style that I've picked up from reading dozens of Stephen King novels...it's not just like him but it's got just a hint of his voice as well as other authors (such as Harper Lee, Herman Melville, and John Knowles).

^_^ I read too much.

Good luck with this story, I'm sure you'll get better. (Meant as a compliment)

~Gaki

Odd story so far... I kinda feel lost. THis is weird. But it's pretty funny.

What is the point of this story? Is there one? I'm so confused as to what the ** POINT is! What is going on here, I want some info or something, I want a plot other than just eating people, I want STUFF.

this is probably one of the weirdest stories i have ever read, and i mean that in the best possible way there is. it's really amusing, but i think you need some more descriptions. that's just my three cents. anyways, nice job!

weird (in the good sense), but very intriguing. has a lot of potential. when october ate the guy, that kinda made me laugh. maybe it's just my weird sense of humor, but... yeah.

Meh...I wish I could eat people...THAT WOULD BE FUN! lolz Fun chappie...YAY EAT MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! ^_^ :huggles: uh...k'bye

xGeRBeaR49x

Great chapter. I really liked the part where Shark ate the heart.

Can't wait to see the next chapter! Keep writing!