Hey! That was really good. I kinda disagree with Zoey. The repetition of "As the tears stream down my face" made me think of someone crying. I really liked it. Good job!

cya!

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Aww! I love it! That was extremely well-written and very intriguing.

I think you might have over-killed the usage of the title, though, but, other than that, it was osome!

Great job!