I am coming to the conclusion that your opening statements are rarely less than amazing. You have serious talent for drawing the reader straight into your scene.

i like swings and i like this poem :D the repetition brings home this childish innocent belief that things will be better. nice work (and i think there aren't ANY cool cafes in singapore...unless you count starbucks O.o)

what a lovely poem, there's something so sad that lingers within it. it's wonderfully captured, great job.

nice rhyming pattern. only some of it rhymes, which makes it unlike a nursery rhyme but more of something that can be identified at the artistic form (the poem). sweet premise of swings and repetition of 'break' in the poem. yes, singapore fp writers so rock(: i read your lj, and gep has done strange things to my life as well (if we are referring to the crap gifted education programme that the screwed moe created). i still think they made a mistake with my test -sigh. what school are you? i'm in rgs. anyway, overall, your poem is sweet, but sad, and has no grammatical errors at all (given some space for artistic liberties to be taken, that is).

i like the gentle whimisicality of this piece...it's very aptly titled...and the images are carefully-crafted, with significance. "It is with this assurance we live each day,/we cry, we cry, but here we'll stay." these lines are poignant and yet, brave. do keep writing :D

Sweet and pretty and delicate and smooth and modern. I like it.

i love the contrast, of the bright green sweaters and the rainy playground, well done :)

-big smile- you've captured the moment so well! I especially loved the ending. Almost seemed like a riddle...beautiful images

I really like your choice of repetition in this poem; it's just right. Love the end rhyme in the last two lines! A heartwarming piece. (:

that was just adorable.. love it!