Wonderful poem. So many great lines in this.

ah tearing through flesh.

burning, burning. quite lovely indeed dear

(isnt it odd how we al become repetitions of one another, we use the same words. like another today word: ash, i just find it amusing)

-violent-

you're incredible, you do know that right? you better. this is so gorgeous. i love all the verses. every word is perfect.

i love the mention of Achillies. It was just beautiful. No words could really describe it. Outstanding.

Shavo

if i could have half your talent, i would never stop smiling.

amazing. as always. what can i say? nothing you write can be anything but flawless.

hm...it was brutal. and it hurts. in a beautiful way.

Oh, that was just amazing, everything was just perfect. -is deeply jealous-

"the snake grinning, kissing/the soul of your/Achilles heel you break/the skin with your/broken-tipped arrow grinning:"

Can I just say Wow. 'Cause that stanza was just brilliant. What a way to end.

oh jesus. poisonous outpouring of GORGEOUS imagery, i stand corrected. lovelovel.o.v.e. x

It slides all the way through temptation and leaves you clinging by the fingertips. I love your work.

i love your poetry... "an Eve-addicted apple"...what a brilliant line...heh, it's late here so i'll just leave you with this: amazing poem & please write more soon.

i /love/ the phrase "eve-addicted apple"

and the rhythm of the last stanza

m

I wish I could write like you, I love it. Your poems give me this mini-orgasim!

so beautiful, i really enjoyed this poem. it was very well written. your so talented, keep writing.

Wow! I love your formatting! The poem was also well written! Great Job!

xoxo