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Alteng 2007-08-24 ch 8,	I have heard of this before where the thief can no longer speak a lie. Thomas will most definately be up a creek!! The piper does come off as ver fae like in this as well.
Alexis LePlume 2007-06-11 ch 7,	Firstly, I have to say that I positively adore you for using the term sidhe, and for trying hard to keep with the myths. Starling's character amuses me very much. I also like how you go into how the Piper isnlt exactly in love with his own existence. I do have a few qualms, though. You break up the happenings during the chapters when they really don't need to be broken up. A few times you have one charrie saying something, and you do separate paragraphs for their unbroken speech. I would personally want to keep it all in one paragraph. Overall, the grammar is good, and the spelling is good. I think the story goes by a little too quickly, but experience will remedy that. The tale itself is interesting. I think I'll keep with it. Alexis
bookface31 2006-09-17 ch 1,	Oh my gosh! I love this, and I'm going to read more, just give me some time. I like Melika. And her brothers are cool, too, but I'll have to keep reading. Very good! --bOOkface31--
Broseph115 2006-08-06 ch 3,	wow...suddenly this story just got much much more serious! Admittedly though, I like the turn of events, now we're starting to stray from the old nursery rhyme and I'd like to see where its going. Good job!~Jose
Broseph115 2006-08-03 ch 2,	okay so...this is pretty much all I remember of the story from when I was younger lol and then I think they like beg the guy and give him his money but thats all I got, not having heard the story in almost 18 years lol. I really wish I had more time to read more chapters in a sitting but im regrettfully busy :/
Broseph115 2006-07-31 ch 1,	So I read through this half way before I realized it sounded a lot like the story about the piper and the rats and the town that wouldnt pay the piper...the "pied? ..piper" lol either way, I've figured it out now. Not totally sure what to think of this yet, but im intrigued so I'm gonna read on.
NO LONGER USING 2006-07-24 ch 1,	This was great. The introdcution to the chapter drew me in especially because of the descriptive words. Something I have a passion for. Great work. I'm definitly going to be reading the next chapters, soon, since I'm in a rush at the present. And thanks so much for those two reviews, I loved them. And glad that you liked the story. Thanks for CC ~Lacee
Alteng 2006-07-14 ch 7,	Strangely enough, Starling reminds me of Olivier my story, but Olivier has some major reasons for being the way he is. Anyway, Mel needs to beat Staling senseless! She is asking for it indeed! You do write Starling well. The thing about talking to the horses is interesting. Bell needs to be a bit more belligerent at that. As for your question about folklore. Most of my information comes from books. I spent a good many hours in the library, and folklore is under the 398 section of the Dewey decimal, if your library still runs on that system. My main source of information on Kobolds came from a book called "The German Legends of the Brothers Grimm". I origianly got my inspiration to write Bane of Rendsberg from an art book called "Faeries". It has a thing on Kobolds there as well. There is also a nice little book called "The Encyclopedia of Things that Never Were". I have a book upstairs on Irish folklore as well. Never really got into that one. In the bookstores, fairy books and the like are found in the New Age section. Go figure! As far as online goes. My boyfriend typed in "Kobold" in the search engine of aol, and he got a site called everthing.com. It had some descent information. You need to get a real email address, dear. Yahoo has a freebie account and so does hotmail. That way I can send you long emails on the subject . . . I am as consistent as the stories I write, because I don't have much time!
oddleng 2006-07-08 ch 7,	So you were just making that up as you went along? -be's impressed- That is decidedly Eragon, though. Or... Yeah. It is. I saw Dead Man's Chest today! Wahahaha! -dances around in circles, crazy-like- -\|odd\|
cutie_pie_unrated 2006-07-07 ch 7,	This chapter is good as it highlights Mel's stubbornness. It is also very funny because of Starling. She's a kind of comic relief that was much needed. I'd like to hear more about the Piper. You have cryptic comments but nothing concrete. It adds suspense but it makes things less clear. It is also kind of confusing that you put the horses comments in italics. While it distinguishes thier speech, it is easy to confuse thier comments with Mel's thoughts.
Book Eater 2006-07-07 ch 7,	I love this chapter! Good touch with Starling pickpocketing the man, and the whole "talking with animals" thing was amazing. Very creative reason for Starling to be introducing it...she wanted to eat the food...I hope your writer's block lifts. Writer's block...it is a curse...it makes the readers have to wait for the new chapters! And it is a curse on the writer, too.
never and ever more 2006-06-17 ch 6,	and you twist another fary tale into the lot, very good, I congradulate you
cutie_pie_unrated 2006-06-04 ch 6,	I think you id a nice job on introducing Starling although, as Alteng says, you did not follow the rules. You did make the chapters loger too. Please update it.
Alteng 2006-06-02 ch 6,	Yes, Starling is easily pleased. The story was quite intriguing and combined a few more legends in there. The Piper is an amazing fellow altogether. One of those folks who sticks his fingers in all the pies. Ah, and as for fairies eating. That all depends on what kind of fairy, and sometimes the diet is specific. I have spent too long in research, mind you. But one of the things (other than the Kobolds that I write about), the fairies from Sleeping Beauty dined at the birth of the princess. Still, your rules are your rules. And I like how Starling is so ironic and rather ditzy!
oddleng 2006-06-01 ch 6,	C'est magnifique! Sorry I didn't leave a review for chapters 4 and 5, but I figured I'd just doa big ol' combined review when I finished. So. The thot isht plickening! How lovely! And... I must confess... I do find Starling quite rude at times. Oh, and I like the way you incorporated Jack and the Beanstalk in, as well. Nice little trick. I truly do envy you. ^^ -\|odd\|

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