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| NinjaStoryteller 2006-10-04 ch 2,   | I like the snap shot idea, it's interesting. I too can taste how sweet life is in Autumn. |
| Solemn Coyote 2006-08-25 ch 1, | I guess it's a simple poem. It isn't held together by any particularly complex rhyme schemes. It doesn't seem to have any heavy themes hiding just below its surface. There aren't any metaphors or similies. I guess some English professors might look down on it for those reasons. I wouldn't agree with them. "Almost Summer" channels a very clear (and strong) emotion. As for what that emotion is, exactly, it's hard to describe without using poetry. Which is what you did. Somewhere between the touch of rough sand and the scent of aloe lotion is the feeling that summer--with all its promises--will come soon. The repetition of 'almost' helps enforce that. There's something elegantly simple about "Almost Summer", and I hope you'll add a few more seasons to this collection.P.S. There is a minor mispelling of 'limmits'. It doesn't disrupt the flow of the poem, but it kinda nags at the reader. |
| yavie 2006-04-02 ch 1, | now i want summer! that's really nice kt. sque! spring is here! |
| les petits bateaux 2006-03-20 ch 1, | Haha...this is good and very well-described indeed. |
| Princess-anna57 2006-03-19 ch 1, | Gorgeous! Lovely poem. Write on! ~Anna~ |