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| SarahJaneDrkAngl05 2006-04-09 ch 1,   | wow that was cool. i can almost hear the music to this as i read it! great work! ~SarahJane |
| Muted Dragon 2006-03-21 ch 1, | graphic. nice. the line "Girl, I'm losin' you" sounds like what a doctor would say ("We're losing him!"), and doesn't seem to fit with the whole idea of letting a person go. Then again, might be purposely losing a person. Would suck to purposely lose a child in a mall. Would be mean. Anyway, this was a very good piece. would be an awesome music video too. -md- |
| lostandwandering 2006-03-20 ch 1, | damn, that is one powerful piece! keep up the great writing! |
| Strategeus 2006-03-20 ch 1, | Awesome song, we should put music to it and record it! |