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Farrie 2006-04-02 ch 1,	abuseAs always I love the imagery. Loving the poem goes without saying :) The phrase "fable and fright in one bite" is really cool, I think I like it because of the assonance and aliteration (God help me if I've forgotten to spell aliteration!)and the image it invokes!
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-03-23 ch 1,	abuseI'm sure Paravel has summink to do with the Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe... That'd explain the bit to do with cold hehe. Simply beautiful, this one, Unca! xhXix
Faithless Juliet 2006-03-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseI remember! (Sorry about having to come over here, but it won't let me send another one in "Gingerbread" - RUDE!) but I was going to say - don't censor your work! I think that's all. J.
Aquafied 2006-03-22 ch 1,	abuseif i knew what Cair Paravel was. reminds me of carnivals at beautiful villas by the shore.so right and wrong, dusty-beautiful
breezy nostrils 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abusei like the formatting a lot. especially cracks and apart. as for the meaning, well...i've yet to decipher that.
White Tea and Ginger 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abuseI love your style. It's so lovely and unique, and you stay so true to it. Love the last stanza, gorgeously phrased and full of emotion. Great job.
Vivian Rose Pierce 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abuseInteresting...it was a struggle to read, but I still liked the feel of it.
xHannahx 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abuseaw yay! thanks jack, iv had a ** day, but this made me smile. i like the playing with lines and brackets, it really makes you think about meaning. :D Han.
Moondog Dozier 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abuse(Slip and fall from a carousel-spinning in view of anyone-pleasuring away the cold), is just a marvelous rush of words. I like the formatting and presentation. It really adds to the disjointed feel of this. Good write.
LavenderFox-Daisy 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abuseok cool...love this has good twist to it...ur great imgarey freak and we love u the better for it...really cool how you wrote the word 'cracks' very effective and creative mezx
Faithless Juliet 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abuseI honestly don’t know where to begin this with; maybe it’s just me (far across the ocean) but I don’t really know what some of those references meant - bad me - but I liked it. When I first read the title it made me think of THE BEETLES, as in John, Paul, George, and Ringo (and it might still be about that?) I always thought it was funny how bands from the 60’s and 70’s named themselves after odd, or inanimate animals. Like The Monkeys or The Zombies. Cracksmy shell withone dusty wordthat has taken its bittersweet timeto be heardover the noiseof breaking(apart).-I like everything about that passage - from how you played with “cracks” to your use of the word “dusty” which I love! And so on and so forth. I really like the idea of bittersweet time, like when you say that something is taking it’s sweet time it’s going slow, but bittersweet makes me think that it’s going slow for a reason, either good or bad, and that it could deliver something so wildly unexpected and precious that it breaks on contact. Yes, that is why I adore you! to describe and deface you.(so I can crawlaway with mywings intact.)-The mood in this really fluctuates; in the first stanza I see people waiting outside a building to watch a show? And then in the second it’s all about noise (maybe even the band playing something) but in this it’s like you’re hearing it on such a high level that when you understand every word, or cord of the song it becomes meaningless - like when you watch your favorite movie a thousand times and you know every word of it, part of it loses what’s special. I really enjoyed this. Juliet.

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