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| Saoirse Devan 2007-06-26 ch 1,  | abuseOMG, that was really cool, and i am a very, very selective reader. i like the 7th and 8th line, shows directly what she thinks of everyone |
| EyesEmphatic 2007-05-14 ch 1, | abuseThis is almost frightening. I really like it though. Very well written. |
| JessieJean 2007-03-25 ch 1, | abuseDeath is the dove and it's words are lying love... Or at least, that may be on easy method of her taking souls. I know it's broken a many hearts... I love this poem! Wonderful rhyming and formatting, a unique and grand 'story', just beautiful work! |
| burning in effigy 2007-03-10 ch 1, | abusecreepy and haunting.. now i'm kind od paranoid, looking around the room heh excellent ending! |
| Vanishing Shadow 2007-03-07 ch 1, | abuseRather dark, but it's true enough. Who knows what death is like? And the old 'death is peace' sangs in poems and storys can get irratating...a new look at it is...refreshing at times, did you have any death-goddess in mind when you wrote this, or was it your own? |
| Dawnella 2006-06-14 ch 1, | abuseOkay, I know you have a rule to put a comma after every line in poetry, but I don't think that's really necessary if the two separated lines can be linked together. Such as: "With every death I gain another,Soul in which I can control." Truly, you don't need the comma there, because then it sounds like she gains another, and then it just randomly talks about souls. In fact, the last line alone is doubtless a fragment.But I still like this poem. The Goddess of Death does seem kind of morbid, but she IS death. |
| Eamene 2006-04-26 ch 1, | abuseI really loved the poem! It kicked **! Can't wait to see what else you write in the future |
| The Getaway Plan 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abuseI really like this poem...not sure why, its not as if i have a connection with the Goddess! Well written and with meaning...yeah. Got two thumbs up from me.x |
| the laughing ghost 2006-03-21 ch 1, | abusei like the premise of the poem. although, and it may just be my own morbid fascination, but i think death is one of the most misunderstood deities. she's just doing her job and she gets so much flax for it. anyways. great poem! |