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| EnemyWithin 2006-03-27 ch 1,   | Interesting, I like the Kiernan-esque imagery, especially with the spider. My favorite line is "But the Scarecrow, with its eyes misplaced". It is very descriptive, and you use your words well. One suggestion would be to cut a few of your lines down to fit the rhythm as a few of them tend to get a bit awkward. Overall, I liked it and I wasn't disappointed. Keep writing! |