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| Faye Coon 2006-03-21 ch 1,  | abuseThis poem was so-so. You used lovely words, just in bad context. Like when you said 'Darling you’ll be nothing more than discarded metaplasia' you didnt need to theme the poem the whole way through. You should have had a more powerful side metaphore for the entire poem. Check out some of my works, tell me what you think! I'll be looking out for more of your poetry!-Coon |