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| EnemyWithin 2006-03-21 ch 1,   | Very nice, I like your phrases and adjectives, and the music box analogy. My favorite line is "Just places her burdening trophy at the altar of filth/then kneels to the god, as his trumpet sounds the rapture". Great tone and flow. |
| dark stars grace 2006-03-21 ch 1, | oh tragic and so beautiful. very well written, and it flows wonderfully. 'sharp tipped lover'--love it. great job. |