Great. Really great. I love how you use your rhymes--it's not forced at all. And with just a simple ABAB stanza structure, it's very easy to force rhymes. You know what I mean... something like: "Bread tastes so good / When it's covered with butter / Oh, that I would / Open the window shutter." Anyway, you didn't do that crazy stuff.

Whenever I'm writing rhyming poetry, I find it very difficult to actually tell a story. What you have here is, if I may classify such things, a "miniature epic." It's sad, there's some hinting of heroic deeds, there's a definite protagonist, the list goes on. Nice job, very nice poem, and have a nice day in general.

Oh, and I really like your name. "Tenbrae Sica"--what is that? "Dagger of darkness?" Sorry to inflict my stupid attempt at Latin translation on you. Again, have a fantastic day.

A beautiful piece of poetry. Very well written!