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| M.R.Sanner 2006-10-08 ch 1,   | I luv stories with friends who are completely oposite ! Hmm wouldn't micro mini controdict itself ? I mean mini skirts are already short ,so if they were micro that means they would be like non existent , right ? Lol ,sorry couldn't help but think of that . Lol I love how you use Lolita's name . I read your profile and saw you love japan ,hich therefore means you like japanese culture & trends ( as do I ) so I totaly get Lotlita's name ! Can't wait to get to the real story ! Please R&R my story Frog's ,Warts & Kisses ! Write on . Confuzzld Me |
| Jugglingbearperformer 2006-08-17 ch 2, | I'm sorta confused on who the main character is, like who is speaking the whole time in this chappie? Also, I don't like how you have to have every girls reaction, you know, its almost as if your trying even out the characters, but its not working. Other than that I really like it, so please update! |
| Dust Cloud 2006-07-13 ch 2, | The dialogue is kind of wooden. If they're such friends, wouldn't they know the color of their eyes already without needing to discuss them? I do like the valley girl thing, though. ^_^ And the girls seem just a little Mary-Sue-ish. Pretty and amazing, you know? AH! FRUITS BASKET! Great, great anime. Only...it's Kyo...not Kyoun, last I checked. Cat boy, I mean. Let me guess. Kyoun is a cat demon or something of the sort. I think I've given my share of criticism, right? So, what I like is the writing style. You give good descriptions without being overly wordy. Well, I'm done! ~IP~ |
| Dust Cloud 2006-07-13 ch 1, | Good start. I wish a little bit more had been explained about the characters, but i liked the clothing descriptions. |
| hope for rent 2006-05-07 ch 2, | PNGz0rs! MY character's name is Neko! ... Did you copy me? ... No, wait, you did this before me. ^^; Ignore the above bit. -yells- Not updating every Friday! Anywho, I like this story. I think I need more. Update soon! |
| Chris Kelman 2006-03-29 ch 1, | I like the plot to this a lot, very good. |
| Serason 2006-03-28 ch 1, | I like your descriptions. You gave a lot of detail so I think I have a pretty good idea of who the three girls are. Although I have a feeling you'll surprise me. Serason |
| callmebelle 2006-03-22 ch 1, | interesting characters... i'm interested to read more. |
| Still Pretending 2006-03-21 ch 1, | Good description, I can't wait for the plot. |