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| Twilight Starr 2008-01-22 ch 1,   | Interesting poem. I wish I was beautiful, too. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| With Rhyme and Reason 2006-05-26 ch 1, | This is another good one. The only two lines that don't rhyme (except with each other) are very nicely done: "I make believe I'm beautiful," and "I wish that I was beautiful." At first I thought, "Damn! She was doing so well with her rhyming couplets, and then she forgot to rhyme 'beautiful' with something else!" But I see now the lines are supposed to stand out. Your imagery here is very nice. I've always liked the darkness metaphor, especially when used as a deceiver of reality. This poem seems to be about lack of self-acceptance and self-hate--something only cured by the darkness of insanity or the treachery of denial. Very good job on this one. |
| Dabronicci 2006-04-16 ch 1, | I loved this Poem Jen; you reflected your mood perfectly. In addition, your rhyming was strong, and you showed a mastery of the English Language. Well done Jen, very well done indeed. ~Dearest Dictator |