So chaotic, but I must say that I love it. I hope you continue to writing.

whoa-ho. very crazy, very you. love the new penname btw. good stuff, man.

I like it. It reminds me a little of stuff by e.e. cumings.

The rush of this is marvelous. It gets into the readers head and continues from there. It really has a slick jumping through the movement feel to it. Like accelerated snapshots. Well done.

ifn it isn't exactly how most relationships seem to be and the style and format drives that point like a spike through the heart. very awesome!cheers!-rabbit