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| lovefantasyworkreality 2008-02-17 ch 6,  | abuseOkay, I read pretty much the whole thing at once. This is really good, and such a cute ending! This is just a personal preference, but I wouldn't sleep/write about sleeping with anyone prior to marriage. However, it's not like I can/am going to stop you from writing that. It's still really good. I like it! |
| lovefantasyworkreality 2008-02-17 ch 2, | abuseYeah, this is a short chapter, but it's pretty good, and builds up suspense nicely. |
| lovefantasyworkreality 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abuseAww, this is so sweet! It also grabs your attention, which is good. Good job! |
| Enaid 2007-10-19 ch 6, | abuseaw that was really cute. a very good short story. =) |
| R.F.Y. 2007-03-06 ch 6, | abusethis is so awesome! even if it was only six chapters, you put a lot of nice stuff in it! ~Zinf~ |
| Estelin 2006-11-12 ch 6, | abusethis story is really great. keep up the good work. i loved all the characters. |
| Dart Gray 2006-07-31 ch 6, | abuseI want to say first that you are a good writer--I can see it. However, this story is entirely too short. While reading it, I felt like I was missing huge paragraphs of.. well, everything: characterization, setting, dialogue, history, everything. You must have been excited to write this puppy, because you just skipped from one climatic moment to the next with nothing leading up to it. What you're left is with frosting and no cake, you know? I barely know Hailee and Ian, and the story's over OK, I'm beating a dead horse.I'm off to read the sequels and hope they're more full! Keep writing. |
| Courtney 2006-05-16 ch 6, anon. | abuseLauren I really like this story hopefully I'll get around to stronger then ever.bye bye puddin |
| starry night blue 2006-04-14 ch 6, | abuseHehe...that's a very unique way of proposing, isn't it? But..what if Poetry in Motion had gone and gulped down the ring by mistake? @_@ |
| starry night blue 2006-04-14 ch 5, | abuseAh...too much fluff here, eh? But, you know, if I were Hailee's mom, I wouldn't have waited till the end to ask about what's going on... |
| starry night blue 2006-04-14 ch 3, | abuseBefore I say anything else, I must say that your english is pretty good. But...the last part of the story where Ian's mom came isn't that good...I mean, Hailee should've at least asked about what was going on before she let him run off after his mom! |
| starry night blue 2006-04-14 ch 2, | abuseUm...okay, is it just me or was that too wierd? I'm sorry, but the scene with Ian and Hailee didn't make sense that much... Oh, well, onto chapter 3 |
| none 2006-04-13 ch 6, anon. | abuseyou write really long stories you moron lmao just kidding puddin!!Luv yaCourtney |
| Courtney 2006-04-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseyou suck |
| starry night blue 2006-04-11 ch 1, | abuseHey! Sorry I didn't read this sooner!! Well, anyway, this was a pretty good start...but it's not easy to tell a guy you like him...hm |