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| J. N. Laerasyn 2006-05-25 ch 1,   | This was very beautiful... it sounded to me almost like a Native American image there. I love your use of the italicized phrases as well- it added to the efect nicely. I did see kind of a rythm in there, but it seems to me that in a poem about a dance, you might have focused on developing that a little more... just a suggestion. Very beautiful language, overall. :-) |
| Karine Dragon'sheart 2006-04-28 ch 1, | I love the way you've written the stanzas, they just seem to sing to me.Thanks for the review! Laters, KD |
| Simply Mad 2006-04-11 ch 1, | Spooky and very beautiful! I want to draw now XP |