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| ArwenFairTinuviel 2007-04-05 ch 1,   | The title of your poem along drew me in, it was such a great poem, one of the best I have EVER read! (if not the best!) this guy's hands sound so gorgeous, I wish I could read a description of the rest of him!! ;) xx |
| elasticbobaturtle 2006-10-27 ch 2, | Spicy congo beat, yum. Nice job using sensory details, definitely tasty :) |
| Crossing the Rubicon 2006-10-25 ch 1, | I can totally relate to this. My fav.fav.fav.favorite lines are: "His / fast / hard / hands / were beaten into submission / trained to play and they / like to play and they came /back for more..." It's great. |
| wat 2006-10-24 ch 2, | how pretty... aww, now i feel bad. my reviews never do anything for you, do they? well, i guess that there was some confusion for me when you had that break between "grooves" and "attached" so i had to read that a few times over before it ran smoothly.. aside from that, tu poema es muy bonita. (and hopefully that made sense... my spanish teacher still is ebil.) |
| SarahJaneDrkAngl05 2006-07-25 ch 1, | i like how you described his hands. great job! ~SarahJane |
| forsakensmile 2006-03-23 ch 1, | I love this. It does create a sense of rhythm, which is great. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-03-22 ch 1, | The halting beat really gives this an added sound effect. This really circles around well with the distinct colors. You have a wonderful way of creating vivid swirling works that spin the reader through the words at just the right pace. Good write. |
| wat 2006-03-22 ch 1, | good job with the repetition, and loved how you described the music as tasting good. |
| elasticbobaturtle 2006-03-22 ch 1, | Mm, love the pounding rhythm of the words; they match with the meaning in them too. Apricot and chocolate. Yum. Great mood set. |