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| Halcyon Impulsion 2006-07-04 ch 1,   | Ha! I've been here! I've done that! Just last week in fact... favorite?- Tin cups and floral pennies, I was flooded into submission, hands careening carefully;-it just rolls along incredibly. |
| forsakensmile 2006-03-23 ch 1, | Colourful and striking. Rather disorientating effect, which I do like. |
| ronshaberry 2006-03-22 ch 1, | Awesome, I love the clash of all the adjectives, it really seems to make me see the clutteredness (is that a word? It is now) of the shop. Lovely. Awesome. Cool. Great. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-03-22 ch 1, | Wonderful end line. This really creates feeling with the motion. Thrift store feeling. Searching through the discards to find a few things that fit wherever. I realize that this is deeper than that, so you've done well with the double meaning. Well written. Well detailed. Excellent write. |
| Aquafied 2006-03-22 ch 1, | my imagination flew 10 yards, only to spark dead.-clever and biting. ah, the end. so great. its real, is it? |