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| Seraph Strike 2006-03-23 ch 1,   | I like this poem, except the line "like so many crushed flower buds" threw me off a little. I mean, even if they're crushed, flower buds would still smell pretty good. It just doesn't fit the rest of the imagery in your poem. Other than that, great job! Keep writing! |