 helium lost 2006-04-03 . chapter 1Great, unique idea; I never really thought very much about this before. :) You might be able to add more of an impact to the last paragraph by adding a small separation from the rest of the text to show how it breaks off from the narration of the brain. Well-written, though the structure is a bit repetitive in the beginning. Kudos on a good job :)
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