Wow I really liked this piece. It sounds like it would be a good song, and while I usually discourage ending lines on words that arent powerful (e.g. to) it works very wekk in this piece because it goes from a connective to a loud phrase.

By the way, a little bit off of the piece, I was reading your profile, and I recently dyed part of my hair black, and it turned out fuschia-purple as well. Stupid hair dye, haha.

Anyways, I could definately see this becoming a song.

Wow, That's Decidedly freaky... i know that EXACT situation pretty damn well... damn near to the letter too.

in any case, i enjoyed it. You could possibly have turned the angst down a tad, but other than that it was good. write on ^^

o.o *whistles* Wow... that IS angsty... You weren't kiddin'.

Nice one, MC! ^^