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| Jack Milles 2006-05-02 ch 1,   | Really nice poetry. Very soothing. |
| in theory 2006-03-28 ch 1, | I like this, faintly philosophical. (pretty too) |
| Aquafied 2006-03-27 ch 1, | it seems peaceful yet inspiringvery simple (and hah, i am not a great advice giver actually. i am pretty sure most people are winging itif you hadnt heard, hah.) |
| TheUnabomber 2006-03-27 ch 1, | this is nice. we as writer hold an art of words, and you did capture the right scene for this subject.thank you for the review on my with me poem. |
| aiur 2006-03-27 ch 1, | suure! =) i have no life anyways. mm. this is a beautiful concept. i love the message, & the link to art & photography. it brings to like new ideas about what poetry really is. it's beautiful! awesome work. for a suggestion, um ... format? when you write it for fp, use shift+enter instead of just enter & then your lines will stick together (yeah i spend too much time figuring that kind of stuff out) ~kait |
| TW HEART 2006-03-26 ch 1, | This is fantastic. Keep it up |
| Raspberry Twirl 2006-03-23 ch 1, | this is truly an amazing topic! I think that you're are perfectly right, our lives did resemble a white canvas. (well, mine's not white anymore...) I enjoyed your unique and straightforward style. Nice work! |
| Q Quixote 2006-03-23 ch 1, | I like it a lot...it is an honest observation about life. the only thing that confused me as the reader was the profound lack of punctuation, but then again, I am very puncutation happy when I write. The only other thing would be the second to last line...it would maybe (not criticism, just an opninion) make more sense if you changed it to a more smoothly flowing sentence. Overall, good poem. |
| Elle Austen 2006-03-23 ch 1, | Good use of perspective here. I never saw these relationships before. Very creative and unique. Thank you, it was a pleasure to read. |
| Smack Granny 2006-03-23 ch 1, | Nice. good imagery and you use examples that we have all seen and done in real life, art. brilliant. i think in the first few lines (six lines) it doesnt quite flow properly, but thats more than possibly because i have a way of reading poems that often butchers them. should see me reading Wilfred Owen! overall, a good read. |