not bad..not bad...quite short but i think it was pretty good!!

Quite promising start, keep this up!(Sorry, no offence here, but the only thing that is disturbing me are the typographical errors. Maybe you should read your stories twice and edit them ;-) That's what I doa t least.)Btw I like the way Mandy writes. Oh, and another thing: add more depth to your summary, then more people will read this! :-)- Sofia