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| flies.like.decay. 2006-06-09 ch 1,   | if you cant change your shape then i must make fun of you for liking gackt and dir en gray because they sing songs like redemption and stuff i cant spell! ..raisom de'tre! yes, muahahahaha! so anyway...the poem was good, but you hunt? eek, what? no, hehe, i am just being stupid as usual and umm... go mana? lol. |
| hey maria 2006-03-30 ch 1, | Eh. It's a nice message and all, but it's not very effective. |
| Eye of the Needle 2006-03-29 ch 1, | so you've gotten better at poetry...go you! But spell check still doesn't bite. In general the simplicity of this poem works for it's message but i still think you should re think some of it. For example, if you actually made sentences, with puctuation instead of no punctuation at all, then the impact would be greater. And btw...the Japanese cookie...that I'm pretty sure isn't even Japanese...is called Pockey |
| Drops of Jewpiter 2006-03-23 ch 1, | great poem, i love the last three lines 'i may love i may hate but i can not change my shape' only critique is some spl. errors (or typos), i.e 'apees' is spelt 'appease' besides that, awesome job :) ~dropsofjewpiter~ |