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| CTWWFTP 2006-09-05 ch 1,  | abuseYou say you love this, and yet you're still your own worst critic, that's how amazing this was. I love the whole stanza which included what you said was your favorite line. "And doesn't it seem like sometimes/We're really the maze instead of the rat/Because I used to be able to figure us out/But then you changed on me when I turned my back." There's only one part I don't like in this, "Since you’re not grown up enough/To admit seeing is to believe." I don't agree with that, and I think saying that someone isn't grown up enough for something, or accusing one of immaturity, is a sign, in itself, of immaturity. IMHO. Still AMAZING!! Haha. A-maze-ing. Get it? Becasue there's a line about a maze? Yeah, I'm not clever. C'est la vie. |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2006-04-09 ch 1, | abuseI enjoyed this immensely. You see I am trying to stop saying I love your poems but by all I say that is what i mean. These were great lines "Cause dreams just don’t evaporate Killing dreams takes a pinch of love and dash of hate So don’t you whisper in my ear Because I’ve heard more than I wanted to hear" I think that is going on my quotes page. Sincerely, the Stranger in th moonlight. |
| burning kisses 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abuseOMGOODNESS! very jason mrazy- which i LOVE!! "maze" and "rat"- aw algernon. omg this is the one thats so cool when we read it backwards. YAY! so addicting- does that make sense?w/e mazel tov! |
| Rachel-Jane Kensington 2006-03-24 ch 1, | abuseI really loved this. Made a lot of sense and seemed really easy on my brain. It felt *real*, ya know? anyways, liked it much ;) |
| fairEtales 2006-03-24 ch 1, | abuseAHH!! One of my FAVORITES! You did an amazing job. Keep it up, babe! |
| andrealiz. 2006-03-23 ch 1, | abuseI like. it's funny how I thought of Flowers for Algernon, too. that story was sad, but I liked it. your poem is one of the best ones I've read in this format. I used to write in this kind of style, but I always found it hard to find just the right word to rhyme. good job! -andrea liz |